I’m linking up with Denise at Girlie On The Edge Blog, where she hosts Six Sentence Stories, and everyone is invited to write a story or poem constructed of six sentences based on a cue word given.
This week’s cue word is Distance
The Dog Dilemma
The sorrowful little creature had been following Bruno for the past hour at a cautious distance, as Bruno made yet another unsuccessful hunting trip through the forest on a bleak January morning.
At the path to Bruno’s home, Bruno waited for the creature to catch up, and when the creature came he gazed into its sad eyes and whispered soothing words: “Hungry, eh? Cold too? Better come home with me, where it’s warm.”
Bruno’s partner, Belle, was furious when Bruno arrived home accompanied by the sorrowful creature, and her words cut through Bruno as icily as the wind in the January forest: “You can’t bring that thing in here,” she said, “it stinks, it might have fleas and goodness knows what diseases, we don’t even know who its previous owner is, and it might be dangerous, Bruno… have you lost your senses entirely?”
“Take pity on it,” Bruno said, “the creature is cold and exhausted, and looks like it hasn’t been fed in days.”
But Belle was in no mood for pity nor for another mouth to have to feed, and she snarled: “Either it goes, or I go.”
Bruno led the creature back out into the January morning, and then he opened his jaws and bared his sharp teeth, and his ears drew back against his head, and his tail struck an exclamation mark to the report of his growl, and then Bruno lurched forward and chased the creature away, until the sorrowful little human fled back into the forest from where she came.
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Words and photo render by Ford Waight.
Love how you led the story to the final twist
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Thank you, Lisa 🙂
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Perceptive deception…always a reliable neuro pathways tool to crush a sense of certainty…
🎯 Or should I say, dog’s eye!
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Dog’s eye! Bam. Thanks, my friend 🙂
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How clever, excelent! What a nice start to the new blogging year!
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Thanks, BK 🙂
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Plot twist! You made me giggle…
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Cheers, Liz 🙂
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Did not see that one coming. Thought maybe he was going to keep the stray and ditch the B elle.
Well done.
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Thanks Mz Avery. Belle was harsh there I know. With a couple more sentences I might have helped justify her a bit by mentioning her pups she had to feed, and her worry that the human might be a danger to them.
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Excellent twist to this SSS! I certainly wasn’t prepared for it, which is what makes it so great!
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Thanks, Pat 🙂
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A dog and his boy.
Most excellent.
(Nicely done. Not merely in sustaining the ‘initial identities’ but executing the twist as simply as you did… not sure exactly how, but am sure it caused a delayed recognition which made for a stronger impact.)
Good boy! Thats my writer, let’s get you a treat.
lol
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Lol, thanks Clark. Yep this writer’s been a (mostly) good boy last year and deserves a treat 🙂
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Aww… poor human, lol. Nice bit of “misdirection”, V. Did not see the twist until -twisted!
Excellent musical choice (title aside 😉) as the raw sound compliments the tenor of your Six.
Iggy, without doubt, was the godfather of punk.
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Thanks, D 🙂 Yep, poor human (hope she survives – maybe another dog family out there might take her in).
As for Iggy and The Stooges, you’re right, damn straight punk godfathers. IWBYD is from 1969. Audacious.
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I liked the twist at the end where it seems liked the creature was some human being and Bruno an animal.
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Thanks, Frank 🙂
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