I’m linking up with Denise at Girlie On The Edge Blog, where she hosts Six Sentence Stories, and everyone is invited to write a story or poem constructed of six sentences based on a cue word given.
This week’s cue word is line
Editor’s note: the following is an extract from a larger work in progress, a ghost story, and features the characters Henry and Marling. You can read a previous extract here.
The straight line of footprints
Henry went over to the sole window of Doctor Lessing’s office, and when he looked with his sole eye he spied the water fountain on the lawn where he had arranged to meet Marling tomorrow at noon; beyond this lay the sprawling avenues and groves of many trees, and the patients wandering the grounds – twinned by their long shadows which fell about them on the grass like phasmids and mantises from the sun’s late afternoon toil.
‘Not a bad view eh?’ Inspector Du Maurier said, joining Henry at the window. ‘If you enjoy looking at crazy people that is.’
‘How do you know they’re crazy?’ said Henry
‘How do you they’re not? Tell me, how’s the eye?’
Henry ran a finger across the lower seam of his eyepatch and replied, ‘There is no eye.’
Du Maurier stared at the one-eyed Henry then looked away, his gaze falling to the same fountain Henry had been looking at in monovision, his detective eyes – even from the second floor of Doctor Lessing’s office – not failing to see the straight line of footprints embedded in the mud, which led from the fountain and into the hospice, as though the ghost of Marling was deliberately leaving clues.
Love the mystery of this! Du Maurier is a name from the past and the ‘twinned by their long shadows’ is so visual.
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Glad you liked. Thanks so much for the read and comment, Purplestone!
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Well done. The mystery intrigues. I’ll keep an eye out for more….
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Thank you! If future cue words fit I’ll def add more.
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Well, now, you sure have a way with prose.
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Thanks so much, Lisa 🙂
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“…on the grass like phasmids and mantises from the sun’s late afternoon toil.”
Dude!*
Where is Jherek Carnelian when you need him?**
*compliment. not only on the most excellent imagery, but the slightly alien, decidedly …creepy vibe.
** Forgive the shameless fictional character name-dropping. In my defense, it was your drawing at the top of the post that triggered the distant memory.
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Thanks Clark – had to look up Jherek Carnelian there… ah, Mr Moorcock! Yes, it’s for sure an alien and creepy landscape(s) I have as my setting.
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While Moorcock was a total word-machine, back in the day, I will recommend the trilogy in which Jherek was featured, ‘The Dancers at the End of Time’
Very much worth the eye time.
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Intriguing! Love your artwork, too!
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Hi Wibi, thanks 🙂 Glad you liked the artwork too – was a good fit for this story extract.
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“patients wandering the grounds – twinned by their long shadows which fell about them on the grass like phasmids and mantises from the sun’s late afternoon toil.”
Love the poetry of it.
Your Sixes never fail to increase my vocabulary! And I must say, this second excerpt has cast a net on my curiosity. Keep working on this so that one day, we may read it in its entirety. In the meantime, we’ll all have to settle for the morsels, 6 at a time 😀
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Thanks so much, D. The line you quoted is one of my favourites of the whole story.
It would be a dream come true for me if one day the finished story was published, and it’s almost there. Success with poems and short stories so far has been rewarding, but the novel is the big one for me 🙂
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Remote island…hints of internet connection…straight lines of seagulls’ footprints…
Glad I didn’t miss your new six!!
All the best , mate!
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Brilliant, my friend. Remote islands yes! And if you swap out seagulls for magpies you’re good too!
Hope all is well and creative your way!
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good six. glad you’re here with us.
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Thank you UP! Always good to be here when I can 🙂
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Intriguing story, makes you wonder what the crime was that brought Inspector Du Maurier to Dr Lessing’s office, what significance the fountain and why it draws everyone’s attention?
However I can solve the riddle of the line of footprints…the patients are really the Sand People of Tatooine! They walk in single file to hide their numbers, they’re easily scared but will come back with reinforcements!
Keep up the great work and stay safe.
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Thanks FT. The crime is pretty spectacular and involves all the characters in unexpected ways!
Excellent you thought of the Tusken Raiders! 500 vintage bonus points to you good sir!
Stay safe too – off to catch up on your Saturday post now.
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xoVery excellent! Thank you and keep writing!
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Thanks Resa X
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